Thank Thomas Doherty to correct my first essay!

Thank Thomas Doherty to correct my first essay!

      Today, I was got an email that my membership has been approved by this website. Just four hours ago, my Profile Information was corrected by Thomas Dohety .I'm really glad to join here. thank Thomas Doherty again.

My Profile Information Original:

       My name is Guanglei He, and I’m an undergraduate student in China. My major is computer science and technology. I want to improve my English ability.

       In the website, I discovered that you are learning Chinese in recently. I think that the efficient way to study language must be use it. For this reason, I want to communicate with other. I can answer some question with other for Chinese and hope you will help me to improve my English ability.

       If you have interest to communicate with me, please give me a message or send a email with me. my email address is guangleihe@gmail.com
       Thanks!

Correcting by Thomas Doherty:

       My name is Guanglei He, and I’m an undergraduate student in China. My major is computer science and technology. I want to improve my English ability.

       In the website, I discovered that many of you are recently learning Chinese. I think that the efficient way to study language must be to use it. For this reason, I want to communicate with others. I can answer some questions with others  about Chinese and hope that you will help me to improve my English ability.

       If you have an interest to communicate with me, please give me a message or send an email to me.  My email address is guangleihe@gmail.com
       Thanks!

The red characters is new addition by me.

       As the Profile Information say :"I want to communicate with others. I can answer some questions with others  about Chinese and hope that you will help me to improve my English ability."

       I want to progress together with others!.

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